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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 6, 2004 19:52:19 GMT -5
The Shadows chapter 1
“Dang!” Ryan muttered as his zoid was tackled from behind. Ryan’s Liger Zero quickly sprang to its feet. Taking on three zoids was not an easy thing to do, he thought to himself as he dodged the next attack. Games of tag were fun, but this was getting old fast. The Command Wolfs pilot fired its gun at Ryan, but he was too fast for the wolf. He switched on the ion boosters, raising dust as he launched himself towards the nearest cliff. The Command Wolf and two Zaber Fangs took chase, amazingly following at Ryan’s heels. Ryan switched his boosters to a higher power as he leapt towards the cliff wall. As soon as he hit, he climbed the wall like a spider, then jumped backwards. Time seemed to slow down as he flipped towards the closest Zaber Fang, readying the strike laser claw. “How ya like me now!?” Ryan yelled as he came down on top of the enemy zoid, beads of sweat coming from his brown spiked hair. Almost half of the Zaber Fangs face was sliced off as it collided with the ground. Fast as a Pteras, he leapt towards the next opposing tiger zoid. He just barely missed hacking its right leg off when he landed, but turned around quickly with his boosters and rammed the Zaber in the side. The sounds of metal clashing were heard for miles as the liger wrestled his opponent to the ground. With a last attempt at defeating Ryan, the Zaber Fang bit into Ligers shoulder. The Liger let out a roar as the fangs were dug in deeper and deeper into his armor, then the Zabers system froze. Now with the Liger having a severely damaged leg, the Wolf lowered his head, and aimed right at the cockpit. Right before Ryan passed out from exhaustion, he saw a Berserk Fury collide with the Command Wolf, and stab its buster claws through the enemy’s neck. Liger let out one last deafening roar as the battle ended.
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Post by Deadborder on May 6, 2004 23:12:33 GMT -5
Who is Ryan?
What is a Liger Zero Night Strike?
Where are they?
What's going on?
Do they have pants on?
It's a nicely wwritten fight scene, granted. But I think it needs a lot more... like a little bit of explanation.
Rick R.
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 6, 2004 23:16:52 GMT -5
actually, i made it like this on purpose. this is chapter 1. the mysterious short 1 that gets you thinking. but dont worry, ill continue the story. i dunno how long itll b, but itl go on, and will start to make new sense. also, im gonna revise this part right now ;D
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 7, 2004 19:20:33 GMT -5
Chapter 2
Ryan awoke with bruises all over his body and had no idea where he was. His baggy clothing was still on his tall body, stuck to his side from sweat. He was in a little room with a computer, a couch, and a dresser. Then he remembered liger. He quickly got out of bed, even though the bruises hurt like crazy. He opened the door and ran down the corridor like a elementary school child. After running about ten feet he was stopped by a strange girl. He was panting like a dog as he stood there, looking at he girl. All he could think, was WOW. “Its okay, your liger is just fine,” she told him. “Here, sit down there on the couch,” and she pointed to a blue couch next to a big monitor and a table. He trudged over to the couch and calmed down. She told Ryan her name, Kiera. Then she explained how she was a part of a group of zoid pilots called Team Shadow Threat, and piloted the Berserk Fury that he saw. “what’s your name,” she asked as she fixed her long brown hair. “Ryan Storm. Who else is in your team?” Ryan asked as he nervously played with the earring in his left ear. Just as he asked, three more people came into the room. First to introduce himself was the blond kid. He said his name was Jason, and that he piloted the Fire Phoenix. He looked about 13, and was only about five foot 4 inches. Next came Sia. He was tall with very dark, short brown hair and was very strong, judging by his muscles. He said he was 19 and piloted the Buster Eagle. Last, was Lain. Her light blonde hair blew around while she talked. Supposedly she piloted the team Gustav, in which the liger was towed. Lain looked around 16, and was obviously a new zoid pilot. “So, why are you Shadow threat?” Ryan inquired. “Well,” explained Jason, “all of out zoids are painted Black and Silver. In night battles were a major threat to enemy pilots because were so hard to see, so it pretty much makes sense.” “Do you have any family?” asked Lain with a concerned look. “No, my mom died before I was a year old, and my father died when I was 12. He taught me how to pilot the Liger Zero, and that’s all I have. “Well, do you want to join our team Ryan?” asked Kiera, “We’ve been looking for a new pilot, and you fought very well. How did you learn to back flip like that? “I’m a skateboarder, and when I was little I spent most of my time practicing. Now I don’t have time for it, but a couple times a year ill find a place to skate. I use whatever skills I have to help me in my fights.” Sia walked over to the kitchen and picked out a 6 pack of pop. “Help yourself,” he said. “Thanks man, I appreciate it.”
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 7, 2004 19:24:11 GMT -5
Chapter 3
Later that day after taking a long rest, Ryan decided to explore the base. There were six little rooms just like his new one. but all except his were decorated. Next he explored the rec room. It was the room with the big monitor, couch, table, and the kitchen. It was nicely decorated with tons of plants, and zoids models. He had only seen a few zoid models in his life, and this collection seemed very extensive. He especially liked the little Liger Zero and his buddy’s with little CP units on them. Then one really caught his eye. It was a Liger Zero combined with a phoenix looking zoid. Obviously the bird it was combined with was the Fire Phoenix that Jason mentioned. After admiring the little things for awhile, he decided to search for the hanger. After walking two doors past his new room he found the door to the hanger. Inside he found four Beautiful zoids. First, was the Fire Phoenix. It was a very magnificent Flier, painted in a black and silver paint scheme, as were all the other zoids. Jason was cleaning it down while listening to a radio. Before Ryan passed, they talked about The Phoenix a bit. He learned that it could easily get close to mach 3. Second came Sia’s Buster Eagle. It was an incredibly big zoid, with a giant wingspan. Looking around the zoid he saw Sia sitting in the cockpit, messing around with something. He didn’t want to bother him, so he kept moving. Up next was Kiera’s Berserk Fury. The Fury was well known for its power, and there was no way Ryan would ever want to fight one. When he started to walk past it, he saw Kiera looking at its leg. So he decided to get some guts and ask her what she was doing. “Whataya looking at?” he asked, shaking a bit. “Oh, hey Ryan. I’m just inspecting his leg for any damage. Before we found you fighting those other zoids, we had a little problem with a sleeper Guysack. It was pretty annoying so I decided to step on it. When I did, the pincer grabbed the back of my Fury’s leg, so I felt I should make sure there’s no damage.” “Okay, well, I’m gonna go keep looking around. Better check on Liger,” replied Ryan. “’Kay, talk to ya later!” She said with a smile. Last came Lain’s Gustav. It was a huge zoid, without many weapons. “What type of gun is that?” asked Ryan as he watched Lain install a huge gatling gun to its side. “Its called CP-03. It was originally meant for red and dark horns, but I found out how to install it on here. Its pretty powerful and I felt my Gustav needed some firepower.” “Wouldn’t wanna get in the way of that thing,” Ryan joked. “By the way, you might want to go get your liger. He’s sitting over there on the trailers. It was hard enough to get him on, we didn’t want to damage it taking it off the trailers.” “Okay, Thanks a lot Lain” Ryan replied with a smile. He ran over to his Liger Zero, got in, then walked it off of the trailer, over to an empty spot by the rest of the Team. The leg was still damaged and it made an enormous screech every time the shoulder moved. He saw Kiera walk over to him as he hopped out of the Ligers head. “Why were you in that fight anyway, Ryan?” she asked. “I really have no clue,” he said with a shrug.
sorry thats theres no indents in my story. there all there in publisher, but the board takes em away. sooo... corrections? praises? wows? boos? cmon, i wanna kno if my storys any good
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Post by Master-666 on May 8, 2004 4:06:23 GMT -5
its good [sits fidling with thumbs eagerly awaiting next chapter] i want more
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 8, 2004 14:07:30 GMT -5
woot! i am liked! well, im at my dads house, so on sunday ill prolly continue onto ch. 4. i just finished 3 when i posted it after a couple readthroughs + edits. ;D
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Post by Master-666 on May 8, 2004 14:12:48 GMT -5
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 8, 2004 14:24:48 GMT -5
mmm... i dunno..... ill think bout it k? btw, y do you have my molga teaser saved onto your photoalbum?
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Post by Master-666 on May 8, 2004 14:29:21 GMT -5
year the inverted version i posted it and if i delete it the one on the post would dissapear
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 8, 2004 14:44:53 GMT -5
say what? that made no sense
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Post by Master-666 on May 8, 2004 14:48:49 GMT -5
its the inverted version of your teaser and i podted on the topic it was on and if i deleted the pic the the pic in the post would not be there
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 10, 2004 23:06:08 GMT -5
Chapter 4
“Well Ryan, your first battle with Shadow Threat’s coming in two weeks,” Sia said while checking over the teams main monitor, “Looks like we’ll be up against Team Bear. They’ve got six Bear Fighters. Its not much, but at least It’ll be a bit of a challenge with six of ‘em.” “Awesome. Any type of entry thing I gotta do to be ready?” Ryan asked. Sia smiled at him and just waved Jason over. “Get your gun ready Jason, its time!” “WHAT!? Your gonna shoot me!? Dude! What the heck!” “Just follow me man.” said Jason smirking at Ryan’s reaction. Ryan reluctantly trudged after Jason into the hanger. “Pull your Liger around here and step back,” Jason pointed to a cubicle big enough to fit a Giga. The cubicle had a roof on it with a big garage door at the top. It had Thick Walls on Each side, and inside little cavities were a bunch of mechanical arms. Ryan climbed up into his zoids cockpit, and walked it over to the cubicle. After getting it into the center he jumped out and walked over to the edge of the cubicle next to Jason. After checking Ligers position, Jason flipped a switch, punched a couple buttons, and watched as all the little arms came out from the wall and took off all of Liger Zeros armor. Jason went in with a cart, pulled the armor onto it, then put them in a line off to the side. “Now lie him down on his stomach,” said Jason. So Ryan climbed back into his naked ligers cockpit and commanded it into a lying position. After it was down in a good position, he climbed back out and stepped back to his old position, “Okay, what next?” asked Ryan. But quickly his question was answered. The arms came out again, and took off all of the legs. They were each laid down onto their sides, then the Cubicles door slid down. “Now the fun part!” exclaimed Jason when he walked over to a big cabinet next to the cubicle wall. Inside were a bunch of large tubes. six were filled with black stuff while two were filled in silver. On the side of the cubicle, next to the cabinet, was a large tube. Jason grabbed it and connected it with the first large black tube. When a switch was flipped, you could hear a faint spraying sound from inside the cubicle. Then after making sure the connection was hooked up tight, he grabbed a spray gun and attached a long hose from it to another black canister. Jason then grabbed a mask, told Ryan to step back, and started to spray the pieces. Back and forth he moved, putting more and more paint onto the armor pieces. After about thirty minutes, He finished the 1st coat. To let the quick drying paint dry better, they went and got lunch. They had hamburgers made by Lain. “Hahaha, man, you thought we were gonna shoot you!” said Jason with a big grin on his face. “So, Ryan, how’s the ‘shooting’ going?” laughed Sia. “Pretty good I guess!” said Ryan with a little grin on his face. “What are you guys talking about!?” asked Kiera and Lain at the same time. “Well, when I told Jason to bring out the gun, Ryan didn’t think we meant spray gun.” said Sia. Everyone laughed, and Jason laughed so hard his hamburger practically came out his nose.
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 10, 2004 23:45:59 GMT -5
Chapter 5
Ryan suddenly awoke. There were three loud bangs on his door. He looked at the clock. 6:37. “Come in!” he called, just barely awake. Jason came into his room covered in sweat, with his clothing turned partially silver. “C’mon man! Your Ligers done! Everyone’s waiting to see it!” said Jason, tons of enthusiasm in his voice “Alright, go to the hanger. Ill be there in a minute.” mumbled Ryan. Jason sped out of the room while Ryan got himself out of bed, one foot at a time. He put his clothes on, and rubbed his eyes before getting into the hall. He walked into the hanger, then up to the rest of the team. “Ready?” Jason asked. “Ya, c’mon. lets see it.” said Ryan. Jason flipped the switch, and the new Liger Zero was revealed. Ryan’s jaw dropped as he saw the light gleam off of it’s new black and silver paintjob. Light streaked along the body lines as Ryan walked up to it. “What? What happened? What are you guys laughing at?” asked Ryan in utter confusion. “Umm….” laughed Kiera, “look what your doing!” “What…” then it hit him. He was hugging its leg!!!!!!! Everyone broke into a laugh. Ryan continued to walk around it. “What happened to his gun!” he pointed to the tail. “Well,” replied Lain. “While Jason was painting him, I custom made a smoke discharger so that the gun can be replaced with it. All of our zoids have em, so you needed one too! couldn’t be Shadow Threat without being in the shadows!” “Man!” he exclaimed as he climbed into the cockpit, “This is AWSOME! Thanks guys!” he closed the cockpit and walked it out. He moved it to its proper place. Right next to the other team. “Dude, I cant wait for the battle! Were gonna freaking kick the crap outta these guys!”
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Post by skatemonkey89 on May 20, 2004 16:16:54 GMT -5
Chapter 6 “Here it is Ryan, your first team battle,” said Sia as he opened his Buster Eagles cockpit, “You ready man?” “Heck ya, I cant wait to go all kung fooie on those bears butts. I really wanna test out the smoke discharger.” replied Ryan as he ran over to his Liger Zero to hop in. After Kiera and Ryan were situated on the Gustav’s trailers, Jason and Sia took off for the battle field going slow so the rest of the team could keep up. The huge hanger door closed right after they got out, and locked into place.
“Ready teams?” said the judge over all of the zoids intercoms, “ FIGHT!” immediately, five of the Bear Fighters spread out to the left and right as one charged towards Ryan. Reacting quickly, Ryan shot left, then charged the bears side. The Ligers head clashed into the bears side knocking it into a roll that sent it a couple hundred feet across the barren desert field. “Well that was easy, must’ve been a suicidal pilot!” Ryan laughed. He sent the Liger towards the next opponent. Suddenly three missiles crashed down next to the Liger. Ryan was jerked sideways, but was still on his feet and got the charge onto the bear that was going after Kiera. Again, three missiles crashed down besides Ryan. “What the heck? Where is that fool?” Ryan asked over the intercom. “Look four o’clock and watch,” said Sia back over the intercom. The Liger turned just as the Buster Eagle soared over the standing bear, launching one big, black missile. The bear turned right to where the missile came from. Barely ever seeing the missile, the pesky Bear got hit in the chest sending it tumbling backwards with a gap in its chest. “Gotcha!” yelled Kiera. She swung the Berserk Fury’s tail smack into her opponents side making it’s two right legs dent in and almost come off. “Now where’s the last two?” she asked. “I got one!” yelled Jason. His Fire Phoenix swooped low over the firing bear and grabbed it with its talons. It fell back to Zi after being carries two-hundred feet into the air. “Man, I love doing that!” laughed Jason. “C’mon sucker,” muttered Lain as she got her sites onto the last Bear Fighter. Suddenly she released a hail of bullets straight towards the running bear. Almost every bullet made contact, jerking the Bear to the side, than freezing its system after a few bullets penetrated the zoids core. “Mm, toast…” said Lain, grinning evilly. “Nice shot man!” exclaimed Ryan. “You were right Sia, that battle was easy. But at least it was fun! Heh, especially when you blew the friggin crap outta that guy!” “Ya, that’s what I’m here for,” replied Sia, joking. “You two Kiera and Jason. Do you baseball or something Kiera? That was a nice hit.” said Ryan as he liger roared a victoriously. “Not really, but its seems like fun!” she said as the intercom announced the battle over.
comments? please?
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